phatman Posted June 6 Report Share Posted June 6 ok...here are my thoughts...and someone's going to think i'm an asshole but whateva...marko...i think what you wrote is beautiful...passionate...heartfelt...i truly do...BUT...it starts off sounding like a speech than becomes poetry and then ends with what sounds like a prayer...i just want to make sure this is what you were shooting for...i hate to say this, as beautiful as this is written, i think this might be difficult to follow when spoken aloud...if you havent already done so, have someone listen to you recite it...i rather not make other suggestions because it depends on what you were going for...and no matter what, it is a solid, beautiful speech... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
atomicapples Posted June 7 Report Share Posted June 7 Originally posted by phatman ok...here are my thoughts...and someone's going to think i'm an asshole but whateva...marko...i think what you wrote is beautiful...passionate...heartfelt...i truly do...BUT...it starts off sounding like a speech than becomes poetry and then ends with what sounds like a prayer...i just want to make sure this is what you were shooting for...i hate to say this, as beautiful as this is written, i think this might be difficult to follow when spoken aloud...if you havent already done so, have someone listen to you recite it...i rather not make other suggestions because it depends on what you were going for...and no matter what, it is a solid, beautiful speech... too late.. the speech probably happened like 5 hours ago. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dgmodel Posted June 7 Author Report Share Posted June 7 Originally posted by phatman ok...here are my thoughts...and someone's going to think i'm an asshole but whateva...marko...i think what you wrote is beautiful...passionate...heartfelt...i truly do...BUT...it starts off sounding like a speech than becomes poetry and then ends with what sounds like a prayer...i just want to make sure this is what you were shooting for...i hate to say this, as beautiful as this is written, i think this might be difficult to follow when spoken aloud...if you havent already done so, have someone listen to you recite it...i rather not make other suggestions because it depends on what you were going for...and no matter what, it is a solid, beautiful speech... oh well... supposedly it went over great... the whole night ppl where complimenting me on it.. etc... i was soooo damn nervous my voice was shaking... but in any event i survived... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
phatman Posted June 7 Report Share Posted June 7 Originally posted by dgmodel oh well... supposedly it went over great... the whole night ppl where complimenting me on it.. etc... i was soooo damn nervous my voice was shaking... but in any event i survived... cool beans...i'm sure youre glad its over... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dgmodel Posted June 7 Author Report Share Posted June 7 hell yeah~! oh my shit... am i glad.. plus they sprung some surprise reading on me 5 mins before the wedding started... and not only that it was about the "LORD" and religion and etc... i thought i was goign to struck by lightning right then and there... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
erica127 Posted June 7 Report Share Posted June 7 Originally posted by dgmodel oh well... supposedly it went over great... the whole night ppl where complimenting me on it.. etc... i was soooo damn nervous my voice was shaking... but in any event i survived... glad to hear that sweety Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
naughtybabe Posted June 7 Report Share Posted June 7 Originally posted by dgmodel oh well... supposedly it went over great... the whole night ppl where complimenting me on it.. etc... i was soooo damn nervous my voice was shaking... but in any event i survived... Chris told me the speech was beautiful and everyone was moved..... YAY!!! Good for you...Did they laugh at the joke?? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dgmodel Posted June 7 Author Report Share Posted June 7 yeah they laughed... i killed it though... i wish i wouldnt have been so nervous... oh well... no biggie... next time itlll be better... thank you all for your encouragement and support... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Join the conversation
You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.
Note: Your post will require moderator approval before it will be visible.