pluryou Posted August 15 Report Share Posted August 15 Lately I have been writing a lot of poetry. My poems range from being funny to being romantic. There are 2 I wrote that are down right mean. Anyways, I wanted to share this one. It's entitled F.U. No, I'm not saying that to you. It means forever unique. I made this up tp describe me. Please tell me what you think. Forever UniqueI like to act the fool But I still keep my coolLook at the crazy clothes I wearDo I look like I careI like to be differentI like to be freeThat's just a part of meI do silly things To see the smiles it bringsI'm not like anyone elseI enjoy being myselfThat's why I'm F.U.And I will always be true Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
velvetgoldmire Posted August 15 Report Share Posted August 15 From someone who has critiqued a lot of poetry:I like what you are trying to say... about how you are trying to describe yourself and express your own uniquness.A few pointers though:- avoid aa bb cc dd etc rhyme schemes (by this I mean lines 1 & 2 rhyme with each other, and on all the way down)-use poetic devices, such as assonance, consonance, metaphors, similes, etc to describe what you are trying to say and feel. Remember, you are trying to paint a picture with words.-Wordsworth's definition of poetry (the most commonly sited definition) is "An overflow of emotion recollected in tranquility." What this means is that what you are feeling when writing the poem is so energized with emotion that common language does not do it justice. You take that emotion, find a peaceful place, inside or outside, and release that feeling on the world.Basically, in this poem, don't just state how you are. Make us feel how you are.Poetry is extremely hard to write though. I've studied a lot of it, and have learned how to critique and judge it, but basically have only one poem which I feel comfortable showing people. Check it out if you want to: Moon Unit Quake Keep up the writing, Pluryou! It's important to find a way to express how you feel, and poetry is a great way to do just that! Hope I have been of some help to you! See you tomorrow at Sasha! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pluryou Posted August 15 Author Report Share Posted August 15 I really appreciate the advice. I will use it. Your poem kicks ass! I will see everyone tomorrow. Before I wasn't sure if I was going but what would Buzz be without me? Pigs might start flying if I don't show. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
merkie Posted August 15 Report Share Posted August 15 Check it out if you want to: Moon Unit Quake Your poem is amazing. You capture so much emotion in so few words. I give it 2 thumbs up! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pgiddy Posted August 15 Report Share Posted August 15 I also like poetry but am kinda embarrassed to put it out there but here it goes:A Guy's JobA guy sticks his location,In a girl's destination,To increase the population,For the next generation.Do you get my explanation?Or do you need a demonstration? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nautilus60 Posted August 15 Report Share Posted August 15 Originally posted by pgiddy I also like poetry but am kinda embarrassed to put it out there but here it goes:A Guy's JobA guy sticks his location,In a girl's destination,To increase the population,For the next generation.Do you get my explanation?Or do you need a demonstration? Beautiful, *sniff, sniff*, simply beutiful... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pluryou Posted August 15 Author Report Share Posted August 15 Velvet I am not sure if my pm reached you. My pc is so slow and is fucking up. Thank you for the offer. I will see if I can make it to the preparty. Right now I am going home. TTFN! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vicman Posted August 15 Report Share Posted August 15 Originally posted by pgiddy I also like poetry but am kinda embarrassed to put it out there but here it goes:A Guy's JobA guy sticks his location,In a girl's destination,To increase the population,For the next generation.Do you get my explanation?Or do you need a demonstration? :cry: <--- vic overflowing with emotion Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
velvetgoldmire Posted August 15 Report Share Posted August 15 Thanks guys! I'm glad you both enjoyed it!pgiddy- you have the soul of Depeche Mode. Regulate, my brotha. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
weyes Posted August 16 Report Share Posted August 16 i write all the goddamn time, but hardly ever poetry anymore - mostly observational non-fiction . anycrap, here's a short something-or-other; it's in short form, so call it a poem if you want. the date isn't its title, but that's how i keep track of all my work.thursdayfebruaryseventwothousandandtwoi may lose my jazzcoolleaning on the doorjamb'round about midnight wishing you'd explain me youand knowing hard it's your turn to callmy cigarette just burns a little faster tonight. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest jroo Posted August 19 Report Share Posted August 19 Originally posted by velvetgoldmire is it true that poets dont like to explain their work? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
velvetgoldmire Posted August 19 Report Share Posted August 19 Originally posted by jroo is it true that poets dont like to explain their work? some poets do, some poets don't. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pluryou Posted August 19 Author Report Share Posted August 19 spoken like a true poet. LOL Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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